The Killer
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Couldn’t recall how I got here
Darkness
Unfamiliar place
Dizziness
Blinded me more
Your voice echoing
Struggled to open my eyes
Blurred, just a pair of beautiful eyes
Voice echoing
Struggled to see thy lips talking
Blurred, just a beautiful smile
Couldn’t move
So weak
Hands and feet,
Both tied up
Your voice echoing
Heaven sent
Oh pretty eyes, pretty smile
Here to save me
Woke up, more likely
Still the room won’t change
Scary and cold space
Your arms wrapping me
Felt the urge to stand up
Still weak
Like a dove fallin’
Heaven sent catching me
Can’t recall how I got here
Still scared
Can’t find the answers
Your face leaning closer
Don’t kiss me,
I might die soon
Kill me now,
Don’t kill me soon
© 2010-Jan. b l a i s e
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wow ..verrrry deeeep...i can feel the emotions...sad,loving,surender,hope and despair
nice one (^_^)
@RB
glad to see you here :) it was actually a nightmare. creepy dream..thank you!
@Lipstick
now you read me.. :) thank you!
This is a world of emotion... Nightmares are soo very scary... The one I wrote about was an awake one.. Though a couple months ago, I had one, while freaking out about my imigration status in my new country..Don't remember the dream.. yet, it was maybe a dream that I woke up, feeling a scary presence in my room.. my son was pleasantly sleeping next to me..My eyes were open, saw a shadow of a person float by, yet when I tried to follow.. I could not move my head only my eyes..then, I tried to move my body around... I felt paralysed..(picture, being hit by a stun gun,, that is all I could think of).. once I realized, I could not move more than my eyes.. all I could other than that was the pounding of my heart in my ears..
I have to say, if a loved one was next to me and noticed.. trying to soothe me, I would have probably been more afraid..
PS.. I think I was in shock thinking of the devastating effects it would have on us should my immigration not be successfull.. FEAR.. is deathening (my word)
Beautiful expressions.. :)
yow!!! I think this is a great piece of writing.. it ran a shiver down my spine!
@Invictus
That was so freaking! I've experienced that, too, but without a shadow or whatever..if I'm not mistaken, they call it astral projection? Wherein your body is separated from your spirit..I was literally awake but seems dreaming becoz I couldn't move. Moving anything was so hard, felt like in a coma.I don't remember moving my eyes though..Nothing moved successfully except my tongue.LOL So the next time it happened, I knew what to do :)But man, it was freakishly suffocating! Becoz the hardest thing to do was to breathe.
Yep, FEAR is deathening ( :)your word ) but we have to fight back..
THANK YOU! it does mean something more..
@CM
oww, glad it had an effect on you :) Thanks!
Being a Vietnam Vet I occasionally had nightmares of being chased by dark figures until I forced myself "in my dreams" to turn and chase back. Sometimes I would wake myself struggling to do so. Thanks
wow! you're really a tough man, Micky. thank you mighty Micky! :)
BROUGHT BACK A MEMORY OF A FRIEND WHO HAD BEEN KIDNAPPED YRS. AGO, SHE TOLD ME THE STORY, YOUR POEM REMINDED ME OF THE STORY SHE TOLD ME, SHE WAS RELEASED & IS DOING GOOD TODAY BUT, I KNOW SHE'LL NEVER FORGET THANKS, GREAT HUB....
I can feel the emotion in your writing. I think we can all relate to how fear can really paralyze us.
@KR
Glad she's ok now. It was exactly a kidnap, but luckily, just a bad dream.. :) thank you!
@uliveulearn
brilliant username :) thank you
brilliant and creepily beautiful :D
thank you Uriel :p
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cool, joined..it's flattering to have an invite :) THANK YOU!
I made the fatal mistake of reading this before bedtime on a stomach full of good white wine and sauteed chicken.
I FEEL QUEASY I CAN'T SLEEP but what you have just written is brave brave art!
I am so scared right now that I must leave on the lights - hold on - there's a knock at the door - strange because it's so late - what the fuc-------------------------------------i9hbrtreui4387477737379499@@@@@@@@@ettttttttttt!!!!!!
hahahah sweetdreams Epigramman ;)
FULL of emotion! Great writing...I like to feel and experience what Im reading
I have a memory of feeling that kind of paralizing and overwhelming fear. I am still not sure if it was a dream or if it was real. It doesn't matter though. It felt real.
Such is love. Nailed it!
@AmyTaylor - Glad you liked it. Thanks. (so late to comment back..)
@The Demon Writer - it was a metaphor of love and pain and pain and love..
@Two Poles - Indeed. Wow, glad I did lol Thanks a lot!
Beautifully dark.
Thanks Nefarious Dark :)
Randy Behavior Level 2 Commenter 2 years ago
Beautiful in a creepy way.