Knotted
64fire of orb
your eyes
burn thru my soul
you trace me
but can’t find
what you lookin for
don’t know what I want
you unwrap me
skin to skin
kisses blaze me in
I push you
you pull me in
I can’t roll away
cling like a mud
knotted strangely
more poems
about you and me
you chase me
but dunno
what I’m looking for
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"you trace me
but can’t find
what you lookin for"
Ahhhh, love that.
Honored to receive critiques from you Prof A :) You're exceptionally great! So glad for every word and comment you always leave on my hubs. Thanks a lot :) And thanks for reading my book ;)
Hello Randy! Glad you loved that. :)
So pretty, the words and thoughts that women have. Well- especially comparing to a cave man's (like me). Nice Blaise!
emblazoned on my mind
a truer poet I doubt I will find...
Another hit.. !!
You trace me !! Great
Um wow. I really loved this, Fehl. We all search for ways to understand love better. It's like there is a locked box inside all of us and we want that special person to find the key to it and open it...
Your poetry is an uncanny force to be reckoned with, and it has a power over me. :)
Still editing moi book, Fehl. Wow, getting there slowly. This is great - I sense a kind of a tussle and pushing yet a pulling too. Whoever is "tracing" needs a better set of eyeballs! Heh! Finding the real "us" or the person is the ultimate goal, and wanting to be found too, and our need to be understood is so important to all people.
Some knots need unravelling yet there are some knots that are better treated different. The human heart can be complex, yet so sturdy. Love can really test us, and asks so many amazing things of us.
You are a cool poet, Fehl! So glad we bought your Toss and Turn poems collection! Roll on the next book! And hubs too! Have a nice weekend, moi friend! :D XOX
You’re not a cave man. A cave man doesn’t have a bike and huge aircrafts LOL I love your hubs Mik! You rock :)
Wow Enigmatic! You always flatter me. What can I say...you’re one of the ace poets among these guys here ;) Thank you.
Always Exploring, I always trace you :D Thanks!
Hi Cathy! That’s one of the most amazing things bout poetry…we get to know how people see it. The way you see this is quite interesting and it has a power over me ;) Love compared to a locked box with a key, that’s so enthralling. Like that, this poetry overflows a lot of meanings. There are thousands of strings between me and the person and I think I’ll just let the connection move along.
Anyway, this was as always a spur of the moment..
Your comments and views are always beautiful. Thanks Cath! xx
Hello Cassandra! Wow great book coming up :) You kinda tussled and pushed and pulled? I can imagine how curly you are now ROFLOL It seems that the ‘tracing’ part is the most loved here. Heh! I loved how you said something bout the knots. You guys are great writers and friends. Forever honored you bought my book and made a review of it :) Thanks Cheeky! xx
Fehl, you know us well enough. We are fans forever! :) The tussle and push pull thing was regarding your poem here. ;D But thanks for complimenting moi hair anyhooo! Hehehe! I like Cathy's idea about locked boxes. Wow! I think when we find that special person we have those feelings for - it's like we almost want them to find that box, and even give the person the key to our heart. That could make a great hub! LOL!
Aw we are so happy to be your satisfied customers! LOL! Seriously, you are a great poet, Fehl. And this poem "Knotted" is just more proof. I am sure Cathy feels the same way. :D
I'm a real fan of you two. Oh yeah loved the locked boxes too. Where the hell she got that beautiful idea? LOL Seriously, beautiful imagery :) Why doncha make a hub bout that? Or a poem maybe. You're a great novelist. Would love to read poetry from you LOL
Aw I just write. Cathy is great. Ah this poem Knottted, I wrote it after reading a pretty poetry from Tyler Knott. It's called String Theory. Damn it's awesome! And this was a sort of reaction. Partly like that and the other I can't explain. LOL
H'mm, might ask Cathy to write a hub about locked boxes, see what she thinks. But he insists any of her hubs has to be poetry. Her brain is wired that way. Heh! Me, uh...well it's her baby so I will let her do it! Fehl, I have to confess I am not really a poet. I can write the writing, but believe me, I tried writing a set of lyrics to a song recently and it was sh$t! LOL! If I published it my name would be ruined forever. Hehehe! Although it would be funny too.
Tyler Knott, string theory - okay, will look out for that. Well, it is beautifully inspired, as always, Fehl! As for the other, don't worry. There is always a nice mystery in some of the best poetry, not all things ought to be explained. :)
Haha yah she's wired that way. She writes beautifully..She's a raw poet my friend. Would love to read her next. Would be a challenge if she wrote bout locked box LOL This locked box thing has become a thread I notice. Heh! Wow, lyrics! hahaha Hmmm Now I wonder if I ruined my name publishing poetry and stuffs ROFLOL
Tyler's poetry and haikus are the best in the web. Yup,that's what make them beautiful :D
Hi Fehl. Humm, I could try writing about locked boxes. I have a mad theory about locked boxes, I told Cassy about. Okay, I will write it and dedicate it to you and Cassy. Heh. Challenge accepted.
I would so love Cassy to put those lyrics on a hub. They are ... uh... unusual. Ha. Come on Cass. Don't be SHY. LOL.
Aw Fehl, thanks for saying that about my poetry. I will also look out for Mr Tyler the best poet on earth. Must be veeeeery good, Fehl. (laughs)
We will buy your next book too. Your poetry is always beautiful. You inspire in so many ways. :)
I love Tyler's String Theory. I almost read it everyday LOL Your 'locked boxes' theory sounds interesting. Wow, you would dedicate it to me too? *blushes* I wish Mr. Tyler was a hubber, too. LMAO It's a big flattery when a star dedicates something to her fan :D You know I'm a real fan of you Cath!
haha yup come on Cheeky! Don't be shy!
Someone would be better than Mr. Tyler. She's writing about locked boxes :D
Oh thanks for saying that. :) I'll think bout it. Can't wait to read your books. You're great yourself! :D XX
Fehl, I will email you the embarassing lyrics. But believe me I think they are SH&T !! Hehehehe! Will email them tonight after work. Astra wins me in the poetry stakes I accept that, and so do you, Fehl. :) Okay, time for me to split!
I think we have a bit of competition here, do you think? Does your boyfriend Tyler approve?? LOL! I am kidding here! *grins like hell now!* Ingat ka! :D
OK let me see how awesome they are :D I give the crown to Astra, she's the queen of poetry here.
haha competition..hmmm what are we competing really? Come on, you reign on every bit of writing. Astra's the queen of poetry. Me, uhm, not a royalty LOL
LMAO I'm a fan of Tyler. Doesn't mean I want him. He's too poetic for me. LOL Have a good day moi cheeky friend! :D
Hy Fehl, I emailed the damn lyrics to you. Remember to laugh your ass off.
I was kidding and teasing you, us competing...Goodness! We are cool! Heh! And stop downgrading yourself. It's that damn algorithm, it's affecting everyone on hubs. LOL!
Ooooh, you're a fan of Tyler! I am a fan of Justin Bieber, but he's waaay too young and inexperienced for me. LMAO! I will search him out, see what all the fuss is about. Cheers! Enjoy your day! :)
Cassy should not be teasing you, I will tick her off for that. Bad Kitty. Hehehe. Oh the poem is under way...don't know when I will finish. Watch out for white smoke, or whatever... LOL. Take care Fehl. XX
I literally ROFLOL! I read the damn thing like rapping. Not that it's a bad lyrics, it's so funny! But cute anyway.
Wasn't downgrading moi self. Was just teasing you so your hair curl itself more LMAO
Aw Bieber? He should sing your lyrics ROFL Cheers! Happy St. Patrick's Day to you Team Cheeky! :D
Hi Cathy! It's cool. She's cheeky! LOL Wow, new poem coming up :)Your poetry always smoking hot :D Pretty unusual! TC XX
I am smiling now, Fehl. I knew you would find it funny, as it ends funny. LOL! I just sent you an email, make sure you read it, okay? Oh my teasing - that's cool! My hair will always be curly! Heh! You should try the curly look, it might look good on you! ^_^
Justin singing my lyrics. Um, it won't be the same coming from him Fehl. He's a man. ROFL! We had a great day, and we did try to drown the "Shamrock", but he hid in the bathroom and locked us out, we have him trapped in there now. LOL! Long story!
Happy Weekend from Team Cheeky here! :) xo
Hahaha, you read it finally. That was the funniest thing I read in ages, Fehl, Cassy needs some lessons in poetry, want to help me improve her? LOL. It will tame some cheekiness in her, for about 2 minutes. Ha. :D
Okay, I will get back to that smoking...what was it smoking hot? Oh yes. (laughs) You have presented me with a hard task, you do realise this, Fehl. LOL.
It's nice to see smoking hot, pretty and unusual in the one sentence for me. Hehe. Do have a nice weekend, my not-so-curly Fehl. :D XOXX
Pee pee Phew! So funny! Thanks for the email. I'm learning new tricks from you. Totally brilliant! I tried those lil curls before, I looked so Asian LOL I'd like to try the Afro curls, one time big time :D Love the angelic curls..
Wow, your St. Patrick's Day sounds exciting. I want to drown the shamrock right now LOLOL
Hello Cathy! hahaha yeah me too. I think you can teach her improve it ;) I dunno if I can help you. I mean am I good? LOL
What's with the white smoke really? Is that a metaphor or something? LOL Don't tell me there's a new Pope :D Don't listen to me, I didn't sleep so well. My mind is not on my head LOL
-Checking my sentence- They're two sentences. LOL
Happy weekend to you as well :) XO
I think your talent shines through every line .
lol x Dim
Your talent shines through in every line. lol x Dim x
I have a strange feeling I've been there before. Several times! Beautiful!
Aw thank you lovely Dim :) xx
Little Kim hello! Yeah? :D Thanks for dropping by.
Just commenting again, Fehl. Making sure my comments are getting through okay.
..... I know what I 'look for' in a great writer ......................................................................................................................... someone like you!!!!!!!
I just write..
Thanks a million Epi! :)
Nice poem
"skin to skin
kisses blaze me in"
:)
p.s you're profile picture is cute, just saying.
thanks Midianite :)
sometimes what we are looking for is right under our nose and we dont even know it. beautiful poem.
absolutely right my friend :) thanks!
Sometimes what we look for... we find ... or it finds us...
would be cool if they find each other at the same time..just like kisses..lips to lips.....
I love this poem to bits, it is so crisp and fresh, love love love! I just wanna read again and again! wow.
You hungry Max? Hehehe I am so flattered by your comments and reading my poems today. Your styles are raw and I am a real fan :)
LOL thank you Fehl for your sweet compliments, really =) I love to read your poetry, it's so exquisitely beautiful and overwhelming. Sometimes I just feel like I'm spellbound, I read the poem again and again and I am seeing it from different angles, it's fascinating!
Nothing makes a poet more fulfilled and happy when her readers were fascinated and spellbound. :) Thank you for that, Max. Hope you read my other hubs, poetry and prose mixed together.. Have a sweet day!
Mentalist acer Level 6 Commenter 14 months ago
Your poetry,I find,expects exception from another as you take exceptional expectation,"of thine own self be true"as it should be of yourself Fehl,my critique of "Toss and Turn.;)